Wednesday, March 23, 2011

Help, I need somebody!!!

Okay, I’m being selfish this week. I need your help ***said in the whiniest voice I could muster*** I have a list of agents I want to send my Manuscript to. Apart from hiding in the bushes outside their homes, I’ve properly stalked them for months. I know what they’re looking for. I’m polishing my manuscript until it shines. Last, but not least, I must rewrite the query letter, again. Yes, again. Will the madness never end? *ahem* Rant aside, here I place it for all to see. I humbly step to the side so you can rip it to shreds. And here we go:

Dear Agent,

Sixteen-year old Chloe Carmichael possesses great powers; she only wishes someone had told her of their existence sooner.

Chloe’s sheltered life has no room for the supernatural. Yet, she continually exhibits supernatural power. She witnesses the death of her boyfriend before it occurs, hears voices of people that aren’t present and sees objects move when she’s angry. She cannot ignore the things that have transpired, or the fact that they began the day Chris Thomas arrived.

Chris, suave and handsome, arrived to Whitney Young High School exploding with mystery. He, along with six other teens, weaves a remarkable tale for Chloe, one she’s reluctant to believe. Her real name is Amanda. She and Chris are soul mates from another universe. They must fight to save the world from an enemy they call the E.N.O. Or he’ll destroy them and everyone else on all the universes.

As she acclimates to this new life, she struggles with the perfection of Amanda and the imperfections of Chloe. Her often-overwhelming attraction to Chris is as perplexing as the new super-abilities she possesses. However, she must face a dubious truth. She may never recall Amanda or her infallible life and if she does, she may lose Chloe forever.

THE CHLOE CHRONICLES AND THE REBIRTH is complete at 75,000 words, and is young adult paranormal. This title should fit well with your current interest. It has the elements that you mention on your website… yada yada yada…

The entire novel can be sent at your request. Thank you for your time and consideration.



  1. It sounds good to me. That being said I have never written a query but in my unexpert opinion it sounds intriguing enough to want to know more. Hope that helped.


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